Re: Attn Marketing Gurus: Need help writing a press release
 

Drop one "as well".

Isaac

"Doc" is a nickname, so: E. E. "Doc" Smith.

Axe the comma.

Re: Attn Marketing Gurus: Need help writing a press release
 

Thank you kindly good sir. :D

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You ARE good, Lord Raiden! ;P I see ya!

Re: Attn Marketing Gurus: Need help writing a press release
 

I noticed that it's on your list, but we use PR-Inside all the time for minor announcements at work - it gets us into Google News for free. We used a few others including 1888pressrelease and some of the other ones but none of them were as reliable at getting us into Google News

Re: Attn Marketing Gurus: Need help writing a press release
 

i would change "series known as"... maybe "first novel in the "Bitter Cycles of Man" series"

I would also change "has released" to "announces the release of"

I'm not 100% sure but maybe grammatically the next sentence should have a few commas, IE, "The book, entitled "The Oort Perimeter.", tells...."

One more thing, is there a punctuation in the title of the book? weird man, weird...

ahhhhhh actually, it would be better to put the book title in the first sentence and the series in the second. IE, "Steven Lake, a well known and respected writer and reviewer in the Information Technology sector, announces the release of his new novel, entitled "The Oort Perimeter". The book, as the first part of the "Bitter Cycles of Man" series, tells...

I'd say "which is tasked" rather than "who is tasked", given that it is an organization. I'd also take out ",and who all live on it" from the book description, kinda awkward and unnecessary.

One thing I'm noticing is that a lot of sentences have bits tagged onto the end that really should be integrated, such as "who wish its destruction".. try this "from the myriad of hostile alien races spread across the three galaxies."

minor issues:

This novel is book 1 of a total of 15 novels in the "Bitter Cycles of Man" series which is divided into three sagas: Earthfleet, Lost Fleet, and Lost Races.
(if you've put quotes around all the other titles, why not put them on the sagas?)

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Overfloat, I think the "and all who live in it" phrase is something that sounds as if the common people of this story's era and location would say things that way, just like Celtic or Irish people saying "I'm Chris from the Clan McFann in Caelum Gurst" in those medieval(?) movies. It seems filmy, and I say keep it. Geeks will get it, and this spells Geek's Book to me.

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you're right - i misread it as the organization living on earth. IE - the organization - who all live on it

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lol. The Society is actually a shortened name for "The Brayburn Society", which is the full name of the organization in question. They just got tired of using the full name, so simply shortened it to the "Society". :)

And in regards to your other comments, The period in the title is proper grammar when doing a news post. On the web we're using to doing the period outside the quotes, as that came from a habit by programmers to distinguish punctuation from actual code elements. And for the question about quotes on the name vs no quotes on the sagas, they don't need delimitation like the book name did, given that they're in a list rather than embedded in a sentence.

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Ah, i see the problem - its a US English vs UK English thing
http://wiki.answers.com/Q/When_do_yo...uotation_marks
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quotation_mark#Punctuation

You almost turned my world upside down.

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Can I give you a hand? I would change the part about the novels to this:

"...his first novel, entitled "The Oort Perimeter." It is the first in series known as the "Bitter Cycles of Man."

The novel tells the story of Earthfleet, the military arm of the Society, tasked with Earth's protection. Earthfleet continous struggle for Earth's safety turns into a deadly race against the clock when a mysterious new force alters the delicate power balance of the Galaxy. Now, Earthfleet and their allies must find the truth behind this dark force... before Earth and the nine races are destroyed.

This novel is the first book of a total of 15 novels in this series which is broken down into three sagas: Earthfleet, Lost Fleet, and Lost Races..."

Edit: I could very well change the last sentence of the paragraph (after "Galaxy" and before "This novel is the first book " for:

"Will Earthfleet and their allies find the truth behind this dark force before Earth and the nine races are destroyed?"

Hope it helps!