Too much speculation and too much text. If your title is 'the truth about X' I expect something of the quality of a scientific paper.

A good writer reflects constantly what she wrote, uses credible references, and is able to say a lot using as less words as possible because she realizes readers don't have time to read yet another Holy Bible after a long day of hard labour.

I recommend the writer of the article reads this article by Texrat: How Nokia helped improve my conversational style.